Project Rophelcopter 1-18

[Tyler]

Hi all. It's been an awfully long time since I last posted anything of my own here.

This is pages 1-18 of what has started to become my own personal Duke Nukem Forever project. I've been working on it for three years and it shows (not in a good way). It has that weird hodgepodge of all kinds of different ideas jammed in that projects sitting too long on the production burner tend to have. 75 pages total, 3 years, and all I want to do is scrap the whole thing and start a new one.

Pages are still in WIP state. Some background details left out until I'm done editing. eh. Anyway, here's pages 1-18:

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[West]

Your scene transitions are exceptional. Everything reads really great, I only suggest lightening and loosening the typeface you're lettering with as it's an eyesore compared to your lovely art.

[Tyler]

Thanks a lot!

I'll definitely see about changing out that font. It's easy to forget that people will be reading this thing at normal size, as opposed to zoomed in 300% or something in Photoshop like it usually is when I'm working on it.

[Mr. Average]

I definitely agree. This is a really beautiful bit of work - the balance between the open, minimal parts and the more complex scenes is pretty much what I'd consider ideal. And you have a real knack for dialogue - it reads very smoothly, in a way that I've not seen for quite some time. Smooth dialogue is something of a dying art, and you've done it brilliantly.

--M

[Tyler]

Thanks Mr. Average!

Comic dialogue is something that I've had a hard time adapting to. My writing background is almost exclusively text only, this comic stuff only started recently. Lots to learn making that transition. With these what I've been doing is writing out a lengthy novel-style version of what I want said, then chop that in half, then chop that in half again. Seems to work out okay.