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THE CRUSADES_New Short Story from Magnus Rex

Post by Magnus Rex » Sun Sep 06, 2009 6:56 pm

Hey all!

I recently completed a short story called "Toy Soldiers". It's the first issue from a comic series called "The Crusades" I am developing.

The synopsis is:
The world is consumed in holy fire as the forces of The Ministry converge on the last bastion of freedom...Mecca. THE CRUSADES is a series of interconnected stories set in an alternate reality that explore different facets of the engine of war. Through the prism of one crucial battle, we experience the The Great War through 6 conflicting points of view. A reluctant warrior. A bloodthirsty general. A weapons designer. A nurse. The Emperor...and The Enemy itself.

I don't want to clog the forum up with scattered pages, so you can download the complete story here:
http://www.magnusrex.com/crusades.htm

Hope you guys enjoy it!

Derick

Here are some sample pages:

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Post by Magnus Rex » Sun Sep 06, 2009 6:57 pm

A few more sample pages...

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Re: THE CRUSADES_New Short Story from Magnus Rex

Post by Joost » Tue Sep 08, 2009 7:15 am

Uhm... I guess WOW is the word I'm looking for.

Yeah definitely wow!

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Re: THE CRUSADES_New Short Story from Magnus Rex

Post by MeHighLow » Wed Sep 09, 2009 3:41 am

Really good art. Do I detect some Warhammer40K influences here?

I find the story a tad one-dimensional, with some too obvious juxtapositions and redundant dialogue (for example, the bit when the High Father says: "Sacrifice Battalion 4 to preserve our interests in that region"... It is too vague a sentence to be believable as an excerpt from a strategic meeting.). But overall, it has potential. I will be eagerly awaiting the next installment!
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Post by Magnus Rex » Wed Sep 09, 2009 4:01 am

MeHighLow wrote:Really good art. Do I detect some Warhammer40K influences here?

I find the story a tad one-dimensional, with some too obvious juxtapositions and redundant dialogue (for example, the bit when the High Father says: "Sacrifice Battalion 4 to preserve our interests in that region"... It is too vague a sentence to be believable as an excerpt from a strategic meeting.). But overall, it has potential. I will be eagerly awaiting the next installment!
Thanks for the honest feedback. I will definitely keep it in mind!

Derick

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