Semmie the Forest gnome [Updated 10 may]

[Joost]

Here it is page 7! And... less dialogue!

As always love to hear your thoughts.

[Joost]

Page 8 - Rope

Layout wise this is one of the more boring pages, because of the 4 strips with small pictures. You just can’t have a big panel covering half the page on every page. Therefore I am very happy with the overall look of this page, especially the colors of the bedroom make this page look warm and rich.

[Mr. Average]

The last three panels are particularly effective, I think - the progression of action is very good and easy to follow - and you ended the page on just the right note - it almost compels you to turn the page! This is really developing well!

--M

[Joost]

Thanks M.!

I was hoping that last panel would make a nice cliffhanger. Next page is all about descending, I hope I get the action right!

[Joost]

Now things get really thrilling, because these stairs are high! Gnomes are off course extremely tough guys, but it looks like our main character is going to have a really unpleasant meeting with the floor at the bottom of the stairs. And it probably will be quite a bit more unpleasant then the last time he “kissed” the floor (see page 5).

For the technical part of this post I just like to say I’m starting to regret the fact that I put striped wallpaper in every room. At first it seemed a nice and simple way to give the background more shape and appear more colorful. But on this page it was mainly a nuisance. It primarily cost me a lot more time to get the speed in panels 3, 4 and 5 look just right. But I did it and I am very pleased with the end result.

[Gunwhale]

Ha. Nice manipulation of scale for the stairs. I also like the detail of the green striped wallpaper blurring in the third and fourth panel.

[Joost]

Thanks Ryan! I do like stairs, there's another one coming at the end of the story where I'm quite proud of. I'm glad you like panels 3 and 4 because it was a real pain getting right.

[Joost]

Saved by the clean laundry! No kissing the floor, but a comfortable landing in a big pile of soft bathing towels.
Have fun with page 10.

[Joost]

Page 11.

Have fun!

[Joost]

Page 12.

[Joost]

Page 13. Next one will be page 14, the one I started this thread with. It might be nice to compare the two and see what difference 9 months of practice makes.

[pH]

keep it up!

[Joost]

Thanks pH! Glad to see your comment, I was afraid nobody was checking this thread anymore .

[pH]

I'm here! Keep posting! You're doing great.

I got a little confused on the page where he drops into the laundry pile. It's hard to explain but, the first, second and third panels I read in the order of first, third, then second. Did anyone else have this problem? Maybe you could add some arrows to guide the readers eye.

[jskotte]

Hi, I really like your comic, the style is great, I like your expressive characters and the colors and shading is very well done.