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Robot: 2047

Post by ScottEwen » Thu Sep 20, 2007 11:10 pm

This is the first of two pages for Slave Labor's "Fat Chunk" anthology. The story had to incorporate the theme of robots.

I'm going to greytone it, so this is a work in progress.

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Post by ScottEwen » Fri Sep 21, 2007 4:40 pm

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Post by MG » Fri Sep 21, 2007 7:32 pm

Interesting, nicely rendered. I'm looking forward to seeing where this is going. I think I need to read more of the story before I can adequately pass judgment, though.

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Post by ScottEwen » Fri Sep 21, 2007 10:33 pm

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Post by MG » Sat Sep 22, 2007 7:01 am

haha, cool! But that's it?

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Post by andrewwales » Sat Sep 22, 2007 9:21 am

Great gray scales. Good two-pager, but definitely could be come more, couldn't it?

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Post by ScottEwen » Sat Sep 22, 2007 10:27 am

Thanks guys. I'm not sure, do you mean you'd like to see more stories with these characters, or that you wanted this specific story to be longer?

This was for an anthology, and I was kind of limited by the fact that I only had two pages to work with, and it had to be about robots.

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Post by andrewwales » Sat Sep 22, 2007 2:51 pm

I think it works as a two-pager. I think that's just the effect you would want: "I wonder what happens next!" I don't think you necessarily need to continue it, but if you really like the characters and idea you probably could.

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Post by ScottEwen » Sun Sep 23, 2007 3:07 pm

Cool. I don't know if I'll ever do anything more with this, but here's the finished second page.

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Post by andrew fulton » Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:00 pm

I think the idea of this is great, and its very well executed. The linework is nice and fluid, I especially like the wobbly speech balloons and the lettering.

I actually find myself disappointed that the robot actually woke up at the end. I thought the first page really worked, with the exchange between the kids and I wasn't sure how much they actually expected the robot to work - whether they were seriously troubleshooting or just playing along. I think having the robot be 'real' at the end almost cheapens the emotional potential of the story, the loneliness of the boy and/or the capacity for self-delusion. Or something - maybe I am reading far too much into it.

It makes me think about something i read in an interview with Neil Gaiman about working on Mirrormask with Dave Mckean - how they had this fundamental disagreement where Dave had to make it clear whether something was fantasy or reality, and Neil was quite happy to leave those sort of questions hanging, if not deliberately obfuscated.

Y'know?

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Post by andrewwales » Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:03 pm

Excellent point, Andrew. I hadn't thought of that.

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Post by ScottEwen » Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:23 pm

Interesting, yeah. I mean, I hadn't really put that much thought into it. I'm not sure myself whether the last three panels are reality or fantasy; I'd rather leave it ambiguous and let the reader decide.

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