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After the Snow

Post by aaron » Sun Jun 17, 2007 9:58 pm

This is a new mini 8 page comic I'm working on. The writers name is Joseph A Gauthier. The story title is "After the Snow". These are the first two pages. Any c&c is welcome.

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Post by Josh-Ulrich » Mon Jun 18, 2007 4:32 am

The art looks great, my only crit is on your word baloons. When I read the comic, the baloons make me want to read it very monotone. It makes the characters seem cold and lifeless. I would consider drawing them by hand and scanning them in perhaps, to keep with the flow of your beautiful line work.

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Post by aaron » Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:18 am

Your right, but really the main character is coping with the lose of his wife. Can't be very happy about that. But I will see what I can do to make the flow work better in the balloons. Thanks!

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Post by aaron » Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:41 pm

After the Snow page 3. Any c&c is appreciated.
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Post by jdalton » Fri Jun 22, 2007 9:59 pm

Nice. I like your attention to detail. The only thing I'd say about speech balloons is to try and keep the amount of white space around the text as consistent as possible.
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Post by aaron » Sat Jun 23, 2007 11:31 am

Your right, in the second panel it is too open. Thank you.

*edit* I made those changes to the page 3 dialog. I think it flows a little better, any thoughts?

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Post by Muffin » Sun Jun 24, 2007 1:00 am

I like this a lot! And I really wanna see the rest. Really good expression. I also like the dialogs so far. :)
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Post by aaron » Sun Jun 24, 2007 1:57 am

I really appreciate it muffin. Always good to get some positive feedback!

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Post by willmj » Sun Jun 24, 2007 2:31 am

Hey Aaron, Love your drawing! Looking forward to reading more... :D

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Post by aaron » Sun Jun 24, 2007 3:00 am

Thanks! Have I ever told you that your comic kicks ass? It does.

I'm glad you like it so far.. .

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Post by aaron » Sat Jun 30, 2007 10:37 am

page 4.
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Post by Blom » Sat Jun 30, 2007 1:21 pm

Nice! I like the look, have you thought about coloring it? I think if you got it painted, it will get the look of that fameous cafe painting. That would be cool! :D
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Post by aaron » Mon Jul 02, 2007 5:07 pm

I went and toned down all the dialog balloons to a grey. I think it works better for blending.


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Post by aaron » Fri Jul 06, 2007 4:28 pm

page 5.
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Post by Threshold » Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:41 pm

I'm getting the feeling this whole story is going to be pretty sad...

excellent art, tho. Really top notch communication.

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