After the Snow

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Sun Jun 17, 2007 9:58 pm

This is a new mini 8 page comic I'm working on. The writers name is Joseph A Gauthier. The story title is "After the Snow". These are the first two pages. Any c&c is welcome.

Josh-Ulrich · Post by **Josh-Ulrich** » Mon Jun 18, 2007 4:32 am

The art looks great, my only crit is on your word baloons. When I read the comic, the baloons make me want to read it very monotone. It makes the characters seem cold and lifeless. I would consider drawing them by hand and scanning them in perhaps, to keep with the flow of your beautiful line work.

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:18 am

Your right, but really the main character is coping with the lose of his wife. Can't be very happy about that. But I will see what I can do to make the flow work better in the balloons. Thanks!

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:41 pm

After the Snow page 3. Any c&c is appreciated.
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jdalton · Post by **jdalton** » Fri Jun 22, 2007 9:59 pm

Nice. I like your attention to detail. The only thing I'd say about speech balloons is to try and keep the amount of white space around the text as consistent as possible.

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Sat Jun 23, 2007 11:31 am

Your right, in the second panel it is too open. Thank you.

*edit* I made those changes to the page 3 dialog. I think it flows a little better, any thoughts?

Muffin · Post by **Muffin** » Sun Jun 24, 2007 1:00 am

I like this a lot! And I really wanna see the rest. Really good expression. I also like the dialogs so far.

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Sun Jun 24, 2007 1:57 am

I really appreciate it muffin. Always good to get some positive feedback!

willmj · Post by **willmj** » Sun Jun 24, 2007 2:31 am

Hey Aaron, Love your drawing! Looking forward to reading more...

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Sun Jun 24, 2007 3:00 am

Thanks! Have I ever told you that your comic kicks ass? It does.

I'm glad you like it so far.. .

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Sat Jun 30, 2007 10:37 am

page 4.

Blom · Post by **Blom** » Sat Jun 30, 2007 1:21 pm

Nice! I like the look, have you thought about coloring it? I think if you got it painted, it will get the look of that fameous cafe painting. That would be cool!

aaron · Post by **aaron** » Mon Jul 02, 2007 5:07 pm

I went and toned down all the dialog balloons to a grey. I think it works better for blending.

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aaron · Post by **aaron** » Fri Jul 06, 2007 4:28 pm

page 5.

Threshold · Post by **Threshold** » Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:41 pm

I'm getting the feeling this whole story is going to be pretty sad...

excellent art, tho. Really top notch communication.

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